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Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important to a child’s development as other subjets, so it should be compulsory in high schools. To what extent do you agree or this disagree?

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this
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art
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 is considered to be an essential course in the student's curriculum. Learning
art
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 facilitates
development
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the development
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 of cognitive ability
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as well as
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proved
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proven
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 to be a good leisure activity. I would argue that
art
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lesson
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lessons
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is
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are
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 beneficial and
made
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should be made
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 compulsory at
early
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the early
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 stages of education. The imaginary power of the child is well developed in the early stages of life. Teaching
art
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boost
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boosts
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 not only their imagination capabilities but
also
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help
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helps
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 to solve the complex situations in
day to day
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day-to-day
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 life.
For instance
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, the design in European structures is the fabrication of an artist and famous all around the world.
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, the complex ideas of
high rise
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 buildings are the work done by
the
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specialist
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specialists
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.
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 thought process is possible when the child
was
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is
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 taught in the early stages of
the
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apply
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life. Educational authorities
motivate
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promote
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art
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 as an essential subject for all
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apply
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age
group
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groups
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.
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, every student has different
interest
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interests
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 and it depends
majorly
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largely
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 on the guardians. Apart from paintings and drawing, other forms of
art
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such
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 as Pottery, Embroidery and dyeing
considered
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are considered
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as
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apply
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a
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apply
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good leisure
activity
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activities
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. Since
,
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apply
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 students have to deal with various academic subjects, developing hobbies
adhere
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that adhere
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with
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to
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 them
for
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in
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long
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the long
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 run.
This
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 provides relaxation and
helpful
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is helpful
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 in polishing their skills. Many
artist
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artists
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 learn from school time and become famous
personality
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personalities
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 once
recognized
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recognised
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 by the world. In conclusion, the compulsory
art
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 courses can
made
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make
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 an important aspect in the cerebral development and can be a good time-pass for others. The government can accomplish
this
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 by making proper laws and by
information
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circulating information
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circulation
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apply
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.

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Task Response
Your view is clear, but the essay stays one side. Say how far you agree and add the other view.
Task Response
Make a strong plan. In the intro write your main idea. In body write 2-3 clear reasons with short examples.
Coherence
Link ideas with simple phrases. Use words like 'first', 'in addition', 'for example', 'but' to connect.
Coherence
Each paragraph should have one main point. Start with a topic sentence.
Language Use
Check spelling and grammar. Use short and clear sentences.
Strength
Your position is clear that art should be a compulsory subject.
Strength
You give some good ideas on how art helps imagination and leisure.
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