The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.

The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.
Two figures below demonstrate
that
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apply
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the total
numbers
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number
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of
the
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athelets
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athletes
and the number of two genders who have played in the Olympic
games
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Games
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from 1924 to 2012.
Overall
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, there is a significant growth
of
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in
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the total
numbers
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number
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of athletes
and
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both sexes are elevated during the period, especially after 1984. The total participants
were
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was
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just over 3000 people
and
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most of them were males in 1924.
Then
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, a
gradually
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growth brought the total number of players over 4000, and only
first
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the first
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qualter
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quarter
of them were females. The total number of that in 1984 had a gradual increase in males, which
over
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6000, but only over 1000
of
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female
athlets
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athletes
presented
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participated
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in the game.
In addition
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, nearly 6000
of
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men had seen in
Olympic
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the Olympic
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games in 2012,
while
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nearly 5000
of
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women joined the event
which
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, which
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was a substantial
elevation
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increase
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compare
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compared
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to 1000 female individuals in 1984.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Olympic Games
  • participants
  • historical context
  • trend
  • exponential growth
  • influence
  • world events
  • diversity
  • technological advancements
  • global
  • gender equality
  • International Olympic Committee (IOC)
  • unity
  • competition
  • athletes
  • entry
  • represent
  • delegation
  • boycotts
  • milestones
  • parity
  • inclusive
  • disciplines
  • legacy
  • sponsorship
  • admission
  • elite sportspeople
  • national pride
  • cultural exchange
  • ambassadors
  • sportsmanship
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