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ome people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others belive that some imformation is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Sharing
information
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 in order to
improves
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improve
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 knowledge is a good way
in
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on
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 many
occasion
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occasions
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,
such
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 as
,
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apply
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 research, business, and even
academic
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the academic
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 world.
Altough
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Although
,
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apply
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 some people would not be
to open
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open to
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with
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sharing their thoughts, it's because some
informations
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information
are
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is
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to
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too
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 valuable to be shared freely for them.
This
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 essay will
gives
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give
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 two sides of
perspective
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the perspective
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 regarding
to
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the topic.
Initially
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, sharing particular
information
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 would be so helpful for the one who doesn't know
things
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. It might
boarden
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broaden
 their knowledge with just a simple statement related to their problem. To illustrate, a new employee wouldn't know anything about what to do
in
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on
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 their first day of work, but, by just a simple suggestion from their senior on how to do
things
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 or
task related
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, their likely
accomplished
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to accomplish
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 their work even though they started clueless.
This
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 example shows that sharing
informations
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information
 about something is a wonderful way to help others. Moving on
the
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 opposite of the
exceeding
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preceding
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 paragraph, some people might
considering
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consider
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 their words before telling someone about it
due to
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 the importance of the
information
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is
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. They
afraid
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are afraid
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 they overshared
things
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 that shouldn't be shared with a random person, especially for
them
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those
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 who
works
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work
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 in the
goverment
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government
.
Goverment
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Government
 employees tend to have
several
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a lot of
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information
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 about what's happening inside the country, and that
thing
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information
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 is not suitable for everyone.
Therefore
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, it would not be easy for them to tell something
beacuse
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because
 of the urgency it has. In short, some people would share anything with you without any hesitation, and the rest would be more careful to share
things
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 with strangers. It's all about the urgency it contains, talking about daily life, friends, and hobbies will be easier to share with others, but talking about
such
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an
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apply
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important
things
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are
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is
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 harder to get.

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grammar
Fix many grammar and word use mistakes to make the text easy to read.
structure
Make the intro clear: say what you think at the end of the intro.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple connectors (for example, also, but, however, in addition) to help flow.
task response
Give a clear view or opinion in the end; say what you believe.
content
Use more specific and simple examples that relate to the topic.
content
The topic is set and you try to show both sides.
content
There is a related example about a new worker which shows a point.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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