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The graph below shows the changes in the places where people used to surf the Internet in the years 1998, 2000, 2002 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in the places where people used to surf the Internet in the years 1998, 2000, 2002 and 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives information about the
percentage
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 of people who surfed the
internet
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 in four different areas, over a 6-year period from 1998 to 2004.
Overall
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, what stands out from the chart is that surfing the
internet
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 at home was the most common,
while
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 there was the lowest
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 of
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internet
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 users in
library
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the library
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 during the whole period. Looking at the details,
initially
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, the proportion of
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people who browse the web at home was 55% in 1998, after which the figure declined to around 48% in 2000.
However
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, it experienced a gradual rise to 55% in 2004.
This
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 meant that it had the highest
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 of
four
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the four
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 places over the given period.
In contrast
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, the number of citizens who surf the
internet
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 in
library
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libraries
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 started at about 10% in 1998. Despite increasing steeply to 17% in 2000,
this
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 trend decreased minimally to 15% in the final year. In terms of the
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 of using the web at work and college showed a
slight
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similar pattern
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web users at work saw a fall from 28% to 15% between 1998 and 2004. If we look at the proportion of
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individuals with
internet
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 access at college started at 20% in 1998.
Subsequently
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, it rose insignificantly to 23% in 2002, which was followed by a slow drop to
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18%
 in 2004.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, internet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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