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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Yes, I do enjoy online learning because it's very important as I’m
employee
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.
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, some
people
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 believe that learning remotely is essential these days.
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, some
people
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 don’t think
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 is true because of outdated methods.For me,
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successful
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a successful
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 method to be delivered to everyone in
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 world. But
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do
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 all
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 enjoy online learning? In
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 I am going to draw both opinions and write my own conclusion.
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 with, some
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 think that
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 essential these days to elevate learning methods for a variety of reasons.
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, some
people
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 are working in a different city
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 is far from college.
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, when I was working in Abu
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Dhabi,
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 my college was in
ALAin
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Al Ain
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, sometimes when something happens suddenly
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 when the
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coronavirus
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 pandemic
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happened,
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 everything changed to
remotely
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 learning in order to avoid the spread of the virus.
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, some countries face problems in providing places to teach students.
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, war between countries when they destroy buildings.
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, some
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 enjoy learning different things
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it’s
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 not provided in the same country
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such
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 as learning a new language.
To sum up
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, I really do enjoy online learning because it provides a numerous of
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learning
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styles, and
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it’s
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 substantial
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these days for
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apply
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development.

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task response
Improve task response by fully answering both parts of the question: discuss both pros and cons of online learning and give a clear personal view.
structure
Structure: Start with a clear introduction, then 2-3 body paragraphs with one main idea and example, and finish with a short conclusion.
coherence
Use simple linking words to join ideas, like 'but', 'and', 'for example', 'however'.
grammar
Check grammar in each line. Fix common errors like 'as I’m employee' should be 'as I am an employee', 'remote learning' not 'remotely learning'.
lexical
Word choice: use common words from top 100. Do not use long forms that are hard for readers.
content
There is a clear intention to state your view.
content
The essay includes some real examples to support ideas.
structure
Some organization is present with introduction and conclusion.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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