Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Young couples, presently, are making a conscious decision
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kids in the early phase of their relationship. The main reason behind
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that
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that the negative ramifications of
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than the positive ones, because delaying family-making too much
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causes difficulty later to have a baby. I will explicate my point
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, in today's modern world, both men and women are getting equal education.
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parties
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want to have
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employment
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and earn money
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in order to
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have a safe future. Both husband and wife want to succeed in their careers, and
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, considering a lack of time, they decide not to have a baby
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until
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they are financially stable.
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working in corporate sectors
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have a strict 9-5 schedule, which does not spare them much family or personal time.
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, there are many
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family planning, because,
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an extremely hectic schedule, and with no proper diet,
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are ageing at a double rate internally
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than externally. Henceforth,
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makes it so much harder for them to conceive
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in the later part of their life.
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people
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who
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use chemical contraceptives,
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irreversible damage
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to the reproductive health of a person.
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, most of the actors and actresses
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prefer to have a kid in their late 30s, but
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95% of them get pregnant through
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artificial techniques. Conclusively, I would say
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that
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career satisfaction is the major driving force behind
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a kid later ,but
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they forget that when they avoid it too much, it gets even harder for them
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to conceive a baby, because of the ageing
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and permanent medical damage to the body.

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coherence
Grow your links. Use simple words and linking words to show the flow of ideas. Try 'first', 'also', 'but', 'however', 'in addition' to join lines.
task
Add more on the good side of delaying having kids. Say why some want to wait and how this helps. Give one or two clear examples.
grammar
Check word choice and grammar. Fix spell errors like 'disadvanatges' and use proper punctuation. Use one idea per sentence when you can.
clarity
The writer has a clear view on the topic.
structure
There is an intro and a conclusion.
effort
Some examples are used to back up ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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