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The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the figures for the
birth
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rate
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 and the
death
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rate
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 in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101.
Overall
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, the
birth
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rate
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 experienced considerable growth until 1961 and is expected to decrease steadily,
while
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 the
death
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rate
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 has increased gradually and is projected to plateau after 2051.
Firstly
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, in 1901, the
birth
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rate
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 was roughly 20, which was more than twice that of the
death
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rate
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. Within 60 years, New Zealand saw a dramatic rise in the
birth
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rate
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, reaching a peak of about 65 in 1961.
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, after a period of fluctuation for three decades, the figure began to decline gradually, and in 2041, the nation is estimated to see the
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rate
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 surpassing the
death
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rate
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.
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, the
rate
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 is likely to experience a constant decline until 2101.
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, in terms of the
death
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rate
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,
although
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 its number started at less than 10 at the beginning, New Zealand showed a consistent growth. In 2061, the
rate
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 is expected to reach approximately 60, resulting in a period of stability afterwards.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, rate, death with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • birth rate
  • death rate
  • population growth
  • natural increase
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
  • high
  • low
  • steady
  • change
  • period
  • time
  • early
  • late
  • peak
  • gap
  • forecast
  • aging
  • immigration
  • baby boom
  • life span
  • health care
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