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The four pie charts compare three age categories in Yemen and Italy between the year 2000 and the predications for the year 2050.

The four pie charts compare three age categories in Yemen and Italy between the year 2000 and the predications for the year 2050.
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of population in three groups of people in two countries (Yemen and Italy) in 2000 and
gives
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 the expenditures for the year 20250.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 15-59
years
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 in both nations had the largest proportion in 2000;
however
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,
this
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 figure is expected to increase by 2050 in Yemen,
while
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 in Italy is expected to decrease. The forecast suggests that
while
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0
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the 0
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-14 group
fall
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falls
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, over
60 ages
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60-year-olds
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 witnessed an increase in the future.
To begin
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 with, 46.3% accounted for
15
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the 15
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-59 group, and it is expected to experience a significant increase to 57.3% in 2050, the highest proportion in Yemen over the decade. People over 60
years
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also
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is
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projected to rise slightly from 3.6% in 2000 to 5.7% in 2050.
By contrast
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, the projected percentage for 0-14
years
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 will be 37.0% in 20250,
experienced
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which experienced
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 a dramatic decline from 50.1%. According
Italy
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to Italy
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, just 14.3% 0-14
years
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,
this
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 number is predicted to fall slightly to 11.5%.
Similarly
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, 15-59
years
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also
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is also
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 estimated to decrease considerably from more than half to only 46.2%. In comparison,
population
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the population
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 who are over 60
years
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 is anticipated to grow to 42.3% by 2050.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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