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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

(Livia) With the rise of the internet more and more people are getting their news from social media platforms. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

With the improvement of
technology
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 every
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people
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person
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take
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takes
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 the knowledge
news
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 about the
out
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outside
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world
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and
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apply
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from social
media
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. I think
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 phenomenon has a lot of advantages.
Every thing
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 in the
world
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 has advantages and disadvantages , so
In
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this
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 essay I am going to write about the benefits and risks of
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 phenomenon. On one hand you will found some good things from
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 searching the
news
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 in social
media
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 ,
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 all
people
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 could be stay in contact with the out
world
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 and can see all
news
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 with one click by their phone ,
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this
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 will help the
people
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 to let all of the
world
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 hearing their voices and tell them with all problem they face it in any countries.
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hand
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 you will face some problems
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 opinion.
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example
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example,
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people
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founding
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 the truth very
hardly
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, because
of
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apply
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all
people
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 can share and say what they want
in
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on
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 social
media
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so
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 that will
making
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 more than half of
information
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the information
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in
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on
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media
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is
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wrong and have a lot of mistakes. In
conclusion
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 I believe that you will face some problems from social
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news
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although
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 the benefits of social
media
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news
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 more than problems
but
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 you must be careful when you search about
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anything
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in
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 social
media
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 and
insure
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ensure
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 that
information
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 is true.

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organization
Plan your essay. Use a clear intro, two body parts for good and bad points, and a short ending.
language
Many grammar mistakes make meaning hard. Work on basic forms and common phrases.
development
Give more proof for each point. One or two examples help a lot.
language
Use simple joining words to show compare and contrast (but, however, because, also).
grammar
Check words like 'every', 'world', 'out', and 'to' to keep fit with simple use.
task response
The writer tries to show both sides of the topic.
structure
There is an intro and a conclusion.
content
A small example is given to show how news can be seen quickly.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disadvantages
  • advantages
  • disinformation
  • polarization
  • authenticity
  • user-generated content
  • engagement
  • diversity of viewpoints
  • editorial oversight
  • real-time
  • current events
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