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Excessive use of private cars is considered the main reason for the traffic jam in many cities, which is why the use of public transportation is encouraged. In your opinion, what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

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Introduction
In my opinion, the pros of using
the
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apply
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public
transportation
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 are the
follwing
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following
.
First,
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the
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public
transportation
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decrese
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decreases
 the traffic jam.
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Second
, it is faster
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then
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than
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 the car in the
traiffic
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traffic
.
Third,
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its
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it's
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cheper
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cheaper
 than using a car and having to pay for gas and parking
etc
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, etc
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Body paragraph 1
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on
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 the other hand, the cons of using public
transportation
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 could be, the public
transportation
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 might be
limted
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limited
 to some areas
so
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, so
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somtimes
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sometimes
 you will be forced to use a car or to walk
in
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roods
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roads
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 for walking. In
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addition
addetion
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addetion,
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 public
transportation
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 could be full
beacuse
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because
its
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chepper
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cheaper
.
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last
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 point is public
transportation
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have
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has
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 its own
timeing
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timing
 and it could be
inconvinenc
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inconvenient
 for some people.
Conclusion
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conlude
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conclude
this
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, the pros of using
the
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apply
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public
transpotation
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transportation
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such
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 as the cost and
decresing
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decreasing
 the traffic
jam
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jam,
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compete
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outweigh
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 the cons
so
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, so
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its
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it's
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very
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a very
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recommnded
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recommended
 way of
transportation
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.

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planning
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content
Keep one idea in each body part and add a simple example for it.
coherence
Use link words to show how ideas go from one to the next.
language
Fix spelling and grammar. Use short, clear sentences.
structure
Check the order of your points: point, example, reason.
content
You try to talk about both sides of the topic.
structure
You use First-Second-Third to list ideas.
conclusion
You make a conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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