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Some people believe that capital punishment should not be used. Others, however, argue that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes.

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Introduction
It has been argued that capital
punishment
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 should not be used,
while
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 others believe that it should be used for serious crimes
such
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 as murder. I completely agree with the
later
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latter
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 view.
This
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 essay will discuss both views.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, the individuals who are not in
the favour of
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favour of the
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 death penalty believe that
this
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 will waste a human life. We should
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give
 a chance to the
criminals
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. So that they can start their life afresh
happily
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.
Moreover
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, the
criminals
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 may have dependents who will be affected if they are hanged for a small crime.
For instance
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, most of the
europeon
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European
 countries have banned capital
punishment
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.
Consequently
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, the crime ratio will be minimised and lives will be saved.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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,
death
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the death
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 penalty is helpful in making
the
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apply
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society crime-free. When
government
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the government
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 makes an example out of the
criminals
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, the fear stops people from committing crimes.
For example
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, Saudi Arabia has capital
punishment
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 for drug dealers, who play with people's lives.
As a result
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, we see that the country has the lowest crime
ratio
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rate
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.
Conclusion
To conclude
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,
while
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 giving a chance to
criminals
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 to return to
his
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their
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life
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lives
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 is
benifical
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beneficial
,
but
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apply
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sometimes it is necessary to give
captial
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capital
punishment
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 to
crimals
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criminals
, especially serious
criminals
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 like murderers.
This
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 is necessary in order to maintain the rule of law.

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content
Plan your essay before you write. State your view at once, give two strong points with simple examples, then finish with a short conclusion.
structure
Use link words to show how ideas are tied. Use 'first', 'also', 'but', 'for example', 'therefore'.
grammar
Fix small mistakes in spelling and grammar. Use 'capital punishment' and 'European' properly. Keep to simple words.
content
The writer shows both sides and has a clear end view.
structure
There is a basic plan with introduction, two body parts and a conclusion.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • capital punishment
  • deterrent
  • crime
  • serious offenses
  • justice
  • victims
  • closure
  • life imprisonment
  • rehabilitation
  • legal system
  • fairness
  • wrongful convictions
  • moral
  • public opinion
  • perspectives
  • debate
  • effective
  • punishment
  • families
  • contribute
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