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The chart shows the number of international students studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the number of international students studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates the
number
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 of foreign
students
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 studying at a UK university over a 20-year
period
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 from 1995 to 2015.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
number
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 of
students
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 from Asia and North America showed a noticeable growth to become the first and the second highest
number
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 of
students
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 respectively,
whereas
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Europe
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 and Africa remained almost
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unchanged
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 throughout the two decades. In 1995, the figure for international
students
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 from Asia was 60,
then
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 it climbed incrementally to around 70. After that.
it
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It
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 rose significantly
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to
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a peak
at
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of
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 120
students
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 by the end of the
period
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, to have the biggest
number
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 of overseas
student
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students
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 at the university.
In addition
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, North America remained stable for 5 years and decreased slightly to approximately 35.
However
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, in 2010 it rocketed to exceed
Europe
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 in around 2012, to reach its highest point
to
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of
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 almost 70 by 2015.
In contrast
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 to others, Africa and
Europe
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 showed a similar trend. Africa remained constant between 1995 and 2005,
then
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 went up moderately by 10
students
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.
in
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 the end declined steadily to 20
as
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, as
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 many as
the
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at the
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 beginning of the
period
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.
Moreover
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,
Europe
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 fluctuated slightly throughout the
period
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 , but by the end of the duration it
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had
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 around 50
students
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which
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, which
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 is
same
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the same
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 as 1995.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, period, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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