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The chart shows the number of international students studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the number of international students studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates the number of foreign pupils studying at a UK university over a 20-year
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 from 1995 to 2015.
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, it can be seen that the number of learners from Asia and North America showed a noticeable growth to become the first and the second highest amount of
students
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 respectively,
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Europe
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 and Africa remained relatively stable throughout the two decades. In 1995, the figure for international
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 from Asia was 60,
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 it climbed incrementally to around 70. After that. It rose significantly to a peak of 120
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 by the end of
the
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2015, to have the biggest total of overseas
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 at the university.
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, North America remained stable for 5 years and decreased slightly to approximately 35.
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, in 2010 it rocketed, exceeding
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 in around 2012, to reach its highest point of almost 70 by 2015.
In contrast
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 to others, Africa and
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 showed a similar trend. Africa remained constant between 1995 and 2005,
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 went up moderately by 10
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.In the end declined steadily to 20, the same as at the beginning of the period.
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,
Europe
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 fluctuated slightly throughout the period , but by the end of the
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 it had around 50
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, which is the same as 
1995
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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