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The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010.

The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010.
The line charts below display the use of food in Australia between 1950 and 2010.
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,vegetables and fruits have increased significantly every year.Seafood remained relatively stable. Meat consumption has decreased over the years. Fruits increased consistently every year , starting in 1950 it was 80
Kg
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 , and ending in 2010 ,140
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.Vegetables its was going up and down , and after 1990 they started increasing to 160
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. In 1950 was just below 120
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 , and started to decrease after 1990 it reaching nearly 120 and ended with 80
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 in 2010. Seafood remained relatively stable at 20
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 in 1950 and around 20
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 in 2010.In 1950,bread consumption was 40
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 in 1970, it was nearly 80
Kg
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. After 1970,bread consumption remained stable at 60
Kg
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 in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words kg, person with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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