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Some people think that social skills are as important as academic qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Some
people
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 believe that social
skills
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 are just as important as academic
qualifications
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. I agree with
this
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 view to a large extent because both aspects play a vital role in personal and professional success. On the one hand, some
people
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 believe social
skills
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 are as important as academic
qualifications
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. Because it can help me adapt quickly in a new environment when we have good social
skills
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, and it
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avoids
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avoid
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 being scared and flustered. Meanwhile, social
skills
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 can
promote
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help
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 us
to
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apply
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make new friends
fastly
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quickly
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.
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, in the future
life
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apply
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, we will encounter a variety of problems,
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 as the issues of relevant financial or technological
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issues
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, which cannot be solved by ourselves. At these times, we need through the long-term accumulated social
skills
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 to assist ourselves. Through the wide contact relationships, we can deal with worries efficiently
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 our daily life.
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, some parents argue that teenagers spend too much time
socializing
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socialising
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, like attending
school’s
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school
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club
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clubs
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 or participating in many activities,
will
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which will
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 let their academic
score
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scores
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 decline noticeably, and delay their schoolwork.
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, some
people
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 are good at
socializing
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socialising
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,
then
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 they can make friends quickly in new circumstances. But, they don’t
realize
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realise
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 the origin of each other, only believe what they say, which will lead to an impact on my physical and mental health. Even worse, they may meet bad friends. I think social
skills
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is
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 a technique
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apply
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 which needs to
accumulate
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be accumulated
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experience
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apply
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from childhood. What’s more, between having a good social environment and academics, you must
take
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strike
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balance
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a balance
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, in order to influence learning. In conclusion, social
skills
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 and academic
qualifications
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 are equally important in today’s world.
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qualifications
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 open doors to career opportunities, social
skills
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 ensure that
people
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 can work effectively and build meaningful relationships.
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, I believe both should be valued and developed together.

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structure
Plan your essay first. Make a clear path: point, example, and result.
grammar
Use simple form and fix big grammar mistakes. Keep words easy.
content
Give one clear example for each idea and keep ideas separate.
task response
State your view in the first paragraph and keep it in the rest of the essay.
conclusion
End with a short, strong conclusion that restates your view.
idea
Clear view that both skills and grades matter.
coherence
Use of 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' helps the flow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • social skills
  • academic qualifications
  • interpersonal communication
  • teamwork
  • emotional intelligence
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • leadership
  • career advancement
  • job interviews
  • networking
  • soft skills
  • self-awareness
  • adaptability
  • collaboration
  • creativity
  • analytical skills
  • educational system
  • real-world situations
  • economic success
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