Education should be free to all people and should be paid for and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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is a system where individuals get to learn and study

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the system is

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managed by the

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essay will explain the opinion towards the question asked previously. To address

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matter

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we must understand that in some countries,

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is not free and is paid

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the citizens.

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, in

Thailand

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the

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only supported free

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until the 9th grade

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after that

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citizens had to pay their expenses by themself without

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intervention.

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would affect the decision of students and

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the burden of financial need in their

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education

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. Let alone the university expense, most

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in rural areas have to take loans in order to pay for their kin’s school tuition.

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could potentially create a gap between

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who can afford basic

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and

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who

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.

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, I agree that

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should be free and already funded by the

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. Still,

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could generate an important issue; if a student is not willing to study, would the

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fund

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not go to waste

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concern had been raised for awareness during the past 2

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as half of Thai students did not understand the importance of

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and decided not to

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might mean that half of the funds spent on

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wasted for nothing.

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, the loss of the

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could not outweigh the perks of pooling

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for federations. From the opinion discussed in the second paragraph, the state should pay for

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and control it as they see fit.

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action will greatly reduce the overwhelming fee that has been

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families

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for years.