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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, it is visible that
individuals
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 have a significantly larger number of
options
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 to choose from than before the Industrial Revolution. In
this
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 contemporary era, people often face dilemmas,
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 as deciding what to buy in a supermarket, choosing an appropriate movie to watch, or selecting the right products. From my perspective, I argue that these opportunities have
advantages
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 that outweigh the disadvantages. Primarily, sophisticated technology has led to many
advantages
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 for us, especially by creating more opportunities to choose. Compared with previous decades, we can select from a wider range of
options
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due to
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industrialization
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.
Moreover
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, increased competition and government regulations have resulted in greater variety in our daily lives across different areas.
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, supermarkets now offer hundreds of different brands for a single product, enabling
consumers
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 to select based on price, quality, or personal preference.
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, online streaming platforms provide access to thousands of movies and series, allowing
individuals
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 to choose content
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 their taste and mood.
This
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 abundance of
options
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also
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 encourages businesses to improve their services, thereby benefiting
consumers
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 and promoting innovation across industries. Primarily, sophisticated technology has led to many
advantages
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 for us, especially by creating more opportunities to choose. Compared with previous decades, we can select from a wider range of
options
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due to
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 contemporary
industrialization
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industrialisation
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.
Moreover
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, increased competition and government regulations have resulted in greater variety in our daily lives across different areas.
For example
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, supermarkets now offer hundreds of different brands for a single product, enabling
consumers
Use synonyms
 to select based on price, quality, or personal preference.
Similarly
Linking Words
, online streaming platforms provide access to thousands of movies and series, allowing
individuals
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 to choose content
according to
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 their taste and mood.
This
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 abundance of
options
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also
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 encourages businesses to improve their services, thereby benefiting
consumers
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 and promoting innovation across industries. In conclusion, from my perspective, I strongly agree that having more
options
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 is beneficial, provided that
individuals
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 have sufficient time and resources to make informed choices.
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, the
advantages
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 of having a wider range of
options
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,
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 as increased personal freedom, better quality products, and encouragement of innovation, outweigh the disadvantages.
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, people must develop strategies to manage choices effectively in order to avoid decision fatigue and
maximize
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maximise
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 satisfaction in their daily lives.

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balance
Show both sides of the issue. Add a paragraph that talks about the possible bad sides of many choices and how to handle it.
structure
Name the points simply and tie each point to a clear idea in its own paragraph.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas connect, like 'in addition', 'however', 'as a result'.
content
There is a clear view and a strong stance.
examples
Good use of real life examples (supermarkets, movies).

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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