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Nowadays, people of all ages from certain parts of the world spend most of time at home rather than going outdoors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that nowadays, people of all ages from certain parts of the world spend most of their time at
home
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 rather than going outdoors.
While
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 it is commonly held that most individuals prefer spending time at
home
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, there is
also
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 an argument that they like to go outdoors. I equally disagree and agree with
this
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 statement , and
this
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 essay will detail the reasons why. On one hand, staying at the house reduces expenses
such
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 as shopping, dining out, or entertainment. You can build a strong relationship and have a quality family hour
while
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 you are at
home
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.
In addition
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, some people like to stay at
home
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instead
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 of parties; they are called Antisocial people.
Moreover
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, from the mental health side, it reduces the pressure and gives a relaxing feeling lying on the bed or sofa.
On the other hand
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, going out has a good effect on your mood. It is
also
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 possible to say that having
day
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a day
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 with friends will bring joy and happiness to you.
Furthermore
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, doctors recommend
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that us
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us
Correct pronoun usage
we
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 not
to
Verb problem
apply
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be sedentary, but to do workouts in the fresh air. In conclusion, there is no easy answer to
this
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 topic question. On balance,
however
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, I tend to believe that enjoying your life has a great
reflection
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impact
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 on
our
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your
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 mental and physical
lives
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health
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.

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task
Give one clear view and stick to it. Then add two main reasons with a short example.
coherence
coherence
Use simple links to move from one idea to the next (and, but, also, so, because).
structure
The essay uses the 'on one hand / on the other hand' form to show two sides.
content
Some ideas relate to money saved and mental health.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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