You recently received a letter from a friend asking for your advise on whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter say why she will not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea Suggest the type of job that would be suitable

Hey Harjit, How are you? It's been a
while
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since we had a catch-up. I am glad that you wrote
me
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to me
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and asked my
opnion
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opinion
regarding your career.
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I know you have remarkable achievements in studies, I think it is time to use your
theoratical
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theoretical
experience in
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the real-world
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real-world
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. As you have recently graduated in Supply Chain Management with excellent grades, getting a job would be much easier now than later. As in
this
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profession
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profession,
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there are certain requirements of
age
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an age
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limit
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;
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ignoring the fact
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apply
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could make the
situtation
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situation
difficult in future.
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, as you
know
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I have been working for the Multinational corporation as a junior manager, and they are looking for
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a
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supply chain manager. Being a
friend
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friend,
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I would
only
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not only
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refer you but
also
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personally insist
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that them
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them
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they
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hire you. Being a part of
growing
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a growing
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organization
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is a golden chance, which you should not miss . Given the Marks you achieved in college,
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a managerial
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position would be an excellent opportunity to start a career. I would suggest you don't miss
this
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chance, even if you want to study
you
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, you
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can pursue
as
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it as
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a part-time learner. I hope my opinion
would
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will
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help you to clarify your
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. Warms regard, Amarpreet Singh.

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task response
Task response: you should state clearly why your friend would not enjoy college, give clear reasons, say why a job is a good choice, and end with a plan for the next step.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: write in clear order. Use one idea per paragraph. Use linking words to join ideas. Check spelling and mark.
tone
The letter shows a warm and friendly tone.
content
There is a plan to start work in the field of supply chain.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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