You recently received a letter from a friend asking for your advise on whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter say why she will not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea Suggest the type of job that would be suitable
Hey Harjit,
How are you? It's been a supply chain manager. Being a
while
since we had a catch-up. I am glad that you wrote Linking Words
me
and asked my Change preposition
to me
opnion
regarding your career.
Correct your spelling
opinion
Although
I know you have remarkable achievements in studies, I think it is time to use your Linking Words
theoratical
experience in Correct your spelling
theoretical
Correct article usage
the real-world
real-world
. As you have recently graduated in Supply Chain Management with excellent grades, getting a job would be much easier now than later. As in Use the right word
real world
this
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profession
there are certain requirements of Add a comma
profession,
age
limitCorrect article usage
an age
,
ignoring the factPunctuation problem
;
,
could make the Punctuation problem
apply
situtation
difficult in future.
Correct your spelling
situation
Moreover
, as you Linking Words
know
I have been working for the Multinational corporation as a junior manager, and they are looking forPunctuation problem
know,
Correct article usage
a
friend
I would Punctuation problem
friend,
only
refer you but Rephrase
not only
also
personally insist Linking Words
Correct word choice
that them
them
hire you. Being a part of Correct pronoun usage
they
growing
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a growing
organization
is a golden chance, which you should not miss .
Given the Marks you achieved in college, Use the right word
organisation
managerial
position would be an excellent opportunity to start a career. I would suggest you don't miss Correct article usage
a managerial
this
chance, even if you want to study Linking Words
you
can pursue Punctuation problem
, you
as
a part-time learner.
I hope my opinion Correct pronoun usage
it as
would
help you to clarify your Wrong verb form
will
confusions
.
Warms regard,
Amarpreet Singh.Fix the agreement mistake
confusion
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task response
Task response: you should state clearly why your friend would not enjoy college, give clear reasons, say why a job is a good choice, and end with a plan for the next step.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: write in clear order. Use one idea per paragraph. Use linking words to join ideas. Check spelling and mark.
tone
The letter shows a warm and friendly tone.
content
There is a plan to start work in the field of supply chain.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,