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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now,and how it will look after redevelopment.

The maps depict the layout of a university’s
sports
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center
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centre
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 now and the future plan
about
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 how to
rearrangement
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 it.
Overall
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，there have been very big changes.
In particular
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, the two original outdoor courts have both been transformed into other indoor
sports
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 venues. Nowadays, the university
sports
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center
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 is mainly composed of three parts
:
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 a comprehensive indoor
sports
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center
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 and two outdoor courts. A 25m pool is in the middle of the
sports
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center
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centre
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,
surrounding
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with
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 a changing room、gym、seating、 and reception. The future plan will
take
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bring
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 dramatic changes to the layout of the
sports
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center
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. Before going to
reception
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the reception
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 place, a cafe and a
sports
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 shop will be added
in
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the
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apply
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each side of the door, and new changing rooms will be built next to each of them. In the east of the 25m pool, there is going to build a
sports
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 hall, and two dance studios will be set up on the far east side. The space of
gym
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the gym
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 will expand, with a gate
at
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 the corridor.
Beside
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changing
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the changing
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 room, a big leisure pool will replace the outdoor courts, and connect a changing room at the west of the
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center
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centre
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.

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task
Begin with a clear short view of both maps before you talk about details.
structure
Split the writing into two clean parts: now plan and future plan. Use a new paragraph for each.
cohesion
Use links to guide the reader, like 'first', 'next', 'then', to show steps in order.
grammar
Fix small grammar errors and phrasing, for example 'in the each side' and 'is going to build'.
content
You name the big parts of the center and how the pool sits in the space.
content
You describe several changes in the future plan, not just one idea.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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