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Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore, every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

It is often argued that accessing clean
water
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 is a basic human right, and every household should be provided with a
water
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 supply without
charge
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. In my opinion,
although
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 I agree with
this
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 view, I believe that it should be paid less
instead
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 of being free of
charge
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.
Firstly
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, one major reason why I am holding
this
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 view is that clean
water
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 is essential to human beings.
This
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 is because people need to use
water
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 as part of their lives, and without it, they can not be alive. Many households depend on
water
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 to meet their basic needs.
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, people need to drink clean
water
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 every day and use it for cooking and other necessary needs.
Secondly
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, clean
water
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 is directly linked to the public's health because unpurified
water
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 can cause many diseases,
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 as dengue fever.
Therefore
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, getting access to clean
water
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 without
charge
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 prevents humans from illness caused by unclean
water
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.
However
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, providing
water
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 without
charge
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 leads to a negative impact on the
government
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.
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 means that the
government
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 should
charge
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 a smaller amount for supplying
water
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 to households to maintain the supply system.
For instance
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, when an environmental disaster occurs, the
government
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 needs the budget to maintain the
water
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 provision system so that everyone can access
water
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 smoothly.
Thus
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, every household should pay a smaller amount of the
charge
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instead
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 of being free of
charge
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.
To conclude
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, I believe that
water
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 is vital for everyone, and should be given free access to humans to be healthy and convenient in their daily lives.
Nevertheless
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, I think people should be charged a small amount so that the
government
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 can retain the system smoothly, even if unexpected problems occur

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task response
State a clear view in the first paragraph and keep to it. The essay has a mixed stance now.
coherence
Put one main idea per paragraph and start each with a topic sentence.
coherence
Use linking words to show flow, like First, Next, However, and For example.
grammar
Check small grammar and use simple forms. 'cannot' instead of 'can not', and be careful with facts, like how dengue is spread.
content
Give a real, clear example from life or news to back up your point.
content
Keep to the task: say if water should be free or not and give strong reasons.
structure
Clear steps in the essay help the reader see the plan.
content
You show why policy work is hard, which adds depth.
content
You link water need to health and cost.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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