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The line graph above illustrates the propoortion of tourists who attended Brighton's four different attrction during the next 30 years, begining from 1980's year.

The line graph above illustrates the propoortion of tourists who attended Brighton's four different attrction during the next 30 years, begining from 1980's year.
The line graph above illustrates the
propoortion
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proportion
 of tourists who attended Brighton's four different
attrction
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attractions
 during the next 30 years,
begining
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beginning
 from
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the 1980's
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1980's year
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1980s
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. In
2010
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2010,
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 the highest point among them was having "Pavilion" , which had just over
than
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30
percents
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per cent
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.
The
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 same time
the
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, the
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 least popular was "Art Gallery" with
its
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a little bit fewer than 10
percents
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per cent
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. Even if the "Art Gallery" had lower
percents
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percentages
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 in
beginning
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the beginning
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 than the "Pavilion" , it was
first
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the first
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 which had
reached
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reach
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 its peak,
although
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 it fell rapidly after increasing during 1985-1990 and
experiences
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experienced
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fall
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a fall
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 again until 2010. Despite that "Festival" has
short
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a short
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 range of fluctuation for the whole period, "Pier" couldn't be more popular than him. The moment when "Pier"
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had
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 the closest point to "Festival" was in 2010 year and before
it
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it,
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 they had approximately
15
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a 15
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percent
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per cent
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 difference. Throughout the full given
period
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period,
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 "Festival" had no spontaneous increasing
,
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 or
decreasings
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decreasing
,
while
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 "Pier"
has
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had
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 about 10
percent
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per cent
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fluctuation
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