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The graph illustrates exportation of Scotland to the UK and world in 2014.

The graph illustrates exportation of Scotland to the UK and world in 2014.
he
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 graph illustrates
exportation
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the exportation
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 of Scotland to the
UK
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 and
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world
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the world
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 in 2014.
Overall
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, it can be seen that Scotland exported more to the rest of the
world
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 in most sectors, but in some areas, the
UK
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 was the bigger market. Business
services
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 and wholesale trade were the largest parts of Scotland’s exports,
while
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 agriculture and metals made up the smallest amounts. Taking a look at the
UK
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, the major
export
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exports
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was
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were
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 business
services
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, finance, hotels, and restaurants, reaching almost £14
billion
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. Wholesale and retail
also
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 had a high figure at £8.2
billion
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.
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 contrast, industries like metals (£2.1
billion
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) and agriculture (£0.6
billion
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) were very low. For exports to the rest of the
world
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, chemicals and mineral products were the highest, at £9.5
billion
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, followed by food and drink (£5.8
billion
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) and other manufacturing (£5.9
billion
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). In comparison, agriculture (£2.4
billion
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) and other
services
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 (£3
billion
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) were relatively minor. To summarise , Scotland sent more
services
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 to the rest of the
UK
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,
while
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 manufactured goods
such
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 as chemicals and food were exported more widely to the
world
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 market.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, world, services, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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