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Band 4

The government should invest more money In teaching science than other subjects for the country to be more developed

Spending more money on
science
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 is thought
better
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to be better
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 than
expend
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expending
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 it
to
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on
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 other
subjects
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 for
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country's
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the country's
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 development. Investing currency for many
subjects
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 like math, literature, history and other matters can significantly increase
nation's
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a nation's
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 growth. It opens the way
youngsters
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for youngsters
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 can
study
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In
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in
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 better places and can get better education.
As a result
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, they may have huge investments in future. In my
country
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, people can
study
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 every lesson apart from
science
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and
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, and
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 the number of intelligent people
are
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is
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 outstandingly increasing day by Day. From my point of view: Youngsters can do everything based on their notion without
chatgpt
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 when they
study
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 hard math and geometry. These
subjects
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 enhance younger humans' critical thinking skills.
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,
government
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the government
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 should settle on
these
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this
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 kind of topic. Investing finance on
science
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 can extremely advance that
country
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. Even though donating money
on
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to
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 other
subjects
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 is a great way to expand state strengthening,
furnish
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providing
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 cash
on
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to
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subjects
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 like physics, biology, chemistry
and
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 geography can be the best influence for
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country's
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the country's
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 development.
Although
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 individuals will increase
city's
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the city's
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 growth when they
study
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 other
subjects
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, youngsters can become
scientist
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scientists
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In
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in
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 the future if the state creates good conditions for leakage.
While
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making
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apply
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new discoveries are being
done
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made
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 by smart scientists,
governence's
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governance's
 reputation enlarges among other cities.
Thus
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,
settle
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settling
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budget
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the budget
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 on
science
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 is the
best
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most
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 effective method. In conclusion,
although
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 all academic
subjects
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 have their own value,
science
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 plays a more critical role in a nation's development. It drives innovation, supports economic progress, and solves global challenges.
Therefore
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, governments should
prioritize
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prioritise
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science
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 education to ensure long-term national growth and maintain competitiveness in the modern world.

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planning
Plan before you write. Make a short plan with 3 ideas: why science helps, what else to fund, and how we know it works. Then write a paragraph for each idea.
introduction
Make the start clear. Say your view and what you will cover in the essay.
structure
Each paragraph should have one main idea. Use a clear line to show the idea, then add a small idea or example. End with a short sum up.
linking
Use easy link words to move from one idea to the next. For example: first, also, but, then, in addition, however.
grammar
Be careful with spelling and cap. Use small letters after a period. Check words like 'In' and 'goverance' and 'government' for mistakes.
content
Give clear ideas or facts. If you say 'science helps', add a small example or plan of what you would fund.
content
The essay has a clear stance and ends with a direct conclusion.
content
The writer shows some good ideas about both sides.
language
Some good phrases show the aim to grow the economy and guide future study.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government funding
  • scientific research
  • technological advancements
  • economic growth
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • global challenges
  • talented individuals
  • scientific innovation
  • well-rounded education
  • diverse workforce
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