The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie graph illustrates data round
employment
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in the United
Kingdom
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, in two different years , 88s and 2012.
Overall
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,
men
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's full-time
employment
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had
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nearly half of the
overall
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employment
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in the United
Kingdom
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. It will continue to be significant with only a small decline.
Women
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's full-time
employment
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it's will increase to be the second of
overall
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employment
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in the United
Kingdom
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. In 1988,
men
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's full-time
employment
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accounted for approximately 53% of the
employment
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in the United
Kingdom
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.
However
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, in 2012,
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men
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men's
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full-time jobs will decrease 6%. In 1988,
women
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full-time
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had only
,
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19% of the circle. But, it will be a big increase of around 7% to be the second on the list.
Men
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's part-time
employment
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in 1988
,
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had only 6% around 1,550
men
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who worked part-time in the United
Kingdom
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, and that was 2,131,
employment
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in 2012.
Whereas
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,
Women
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part-time workers in 1988
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had 22% around 5,268
women
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, and that will grew to 5,979 in 2012.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, kingdom, men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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