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Writing Samples
Band 1

Some group of people have benefited from modern communications technology but some people do not have benefit at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I am one of those few
people
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who's
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who
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 agree
of
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on
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 the benefits
from
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of
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 modern communications technology. Modern communications really helped us a lot to communicate across
the
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apply
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the border, even when somebody's distance is so far away.
Previously
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people
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can
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could
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 only communicate via mail. They need to send it via
nearby
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the nearby
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 mail office, put their correspondence address, and have to wait some days
even
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or even
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 weeks if the distance is quite far. But today's society is different. We've come to
age
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an age
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 where we can
poke
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send
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 messages or call a person in one click! It's truly
such
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 a blessing for humanity. Most
people
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 are leaving the traditional way of communication
but
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, but
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 some
people
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also
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has
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have
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 their own ways to enjoy
live
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life
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like
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, like
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 collecting
post cards
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postcards
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. They'd
be
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apply
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travel the world just to collect
country's
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a country's
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 original postcard. They're called
as
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a
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post card
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postcard
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 collector.

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task response
State your view clearly at the start and keep it there. Give a short opinion sentence in the first paragraph.
task response
Your answer should cover both sides: those who benefit and those who do not. Add a counter point and a brief view on it.
coherence
Use a clear paragraph for each idea. Start with a topic sentence and finish with a short point.
coherence
Use linking words to show the flow, like also, but, however, for example.
task response
Add more examples and explain them. Connect them to how technology helps or harms.
grammar
Check grammar. Short sentences help. Watch verb forms and plural s.
content
You show you understand how tech can help people talk over long distance.
content
You use some examples like mail and new chat tools, and postcard idea.
structure
You try to compare new and old ways of talking.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern communications technology
  • global connectivity
  • remote work
  • digital divide
  • e-commerce
  • socioeconomic status
  • geography
  • impersonal
  • face-to-face communication
  • over-reliance
  • cyberbullying
  • misinformation
  • privacy concerns
  • tech-savvy
  • health implications
  • eye strain
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