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The given bar chart illustrates how much money was earned from languages-associated occupations in US dollars in five cities.

The given bar chart illustrates how much money was earned from languages-associated occupations in US dollars in five cities.
The bar chart
provide
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provides
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 key information about how much
money
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spent
Verb problem
was spent
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 and
money
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collected
Verb problem
was collected
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 in
Correct article usage
the different
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different five
Correct word order
five different
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 cities from languages. The units are measured in
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billion
Fix the agreement mistake
billions
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Change preposition
of dollors
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dollors
Correct your spelling
dollars
.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
money
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 spent has
the
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apply
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significat increaced
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significantly increased
,
whereus
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whereas
the
money
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 collected was the lowest income.
According to
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 what is shown,
money
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 collected was slightly over than
money
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 spent during 2001
year
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apply
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.
Than
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Then
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 in
2003
Punctuation problem
2003,
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 the
money
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 collected
decreaced
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decreased
 to 1782
billion
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dollars
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and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 over 2005
money
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 spent
rapid
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rapidly
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to
Verb problem
increased to
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 2472
billion
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dollars
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. In terms of
,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 the
money
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collected
Punctuation problem
collected,
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shown
Wrong verb form
it showed
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 a significant
decreased
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decrease
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 during 2009 years it is about 2105
billion
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dollars
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.
Also
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, in the years ranging from 2009 to
2011
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2011,
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 the
money
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 spent has significantly grown to above 3500
billion
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dollars
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • earnings
  • money
  • income
  • salary
  • city
  • five
  • highest
  • lowest
  • more
  • less
  • bigger
  • smaller
  • range
  • difference
  • gap
  • pattern
  • trend
  • chart
  • data
  • number
  • figure
  • vary
  • differ
  • rise
  • increase
  • grow
  • climb
  • go up
  • fall
  • decrease
  • drop
  • go down
  • steady
  • unchanged
  • similar
  • different
  • compare
  • between
  • across
  • from
  • to
  • about
  • around
  • roughly
  • nearly
  • twice
  • times
  • as
  • than
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