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The given bar chart illustrates how much money was earned from languages-associated occupations in US dollars in five cities.

The given bar chart illustrates how much money was earned from languages-associated occupations in US dollars in five cities.
The bar graph details the total revenue and consumption of jobs related to the languages in US dollars between 2001 and 2011. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the majority of
money
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 spent
occured
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occurred
 in 2011,
whereas
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money
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 collection reached the highest figure in 2007.
Furthermore
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,
money
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 consumption and
money
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 profit had increased gradually. To discuss more on
money
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 collection, in 2001, 1991
billion
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dollors
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dollars
 collected, dipping to 1782
billion
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 in 2003, before
rebouding
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rebounding
 to 2568
billion
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 in 2007. In 2007, it had by far the highest
money
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 collection with 2568
billion
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.
Then
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, it declined again to 2105
billion
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 in 2009, rising to 2304
billion
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at the end
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 of the period.
On the other hand
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,
money
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 consumption had increased steadily without experiencing a decline. In 2001, it commenced with 1863
billion
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, which climbed
similar
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 rates, from 2160 to 2472
billion
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 in 2005, and from 2472 to 2729
billion
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 in 2007. It soared notably from 2729 to 3518
billion
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 in 2009, experiencing a small change from 3518 to 3606
billion
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 in 2011.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • earnings
  • money
  • income
  • salary
  • city
  • five
  • highest
  • lowest
  • more
  • less
  • bigger
  • smaller
  • range
  • difference
  • gap
  • pattern
  • trend
  • chart
  • data
  • number
  • figure
  • vary
  • differ
  • rise
  • increase
  • grow
  • climb
  • go up
  • fall
  • decrease
  • drop
  • go down
  • steady
  • unchanged
  • similar
  • different
  • compare
  • between
  • across
  • from
  • to
  • about
  • around
  • roughly
  • nearly
  • twice
  • times
  • as
  • than
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