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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people think that governments should invest more money in public transport rather than building new roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Government
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The government
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 has been confused these days about their resources. Some masses argue that policymakers should spend their
resoures
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resources
 in local
transports
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transport
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instead
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 of making new roads, I
am
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apply
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strongly agree with the given notion.
To begin
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 with, it will
easy
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be easy
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 for everyone to get access. To explain ,
in
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apply
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these days
people
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 can not afford their
personal
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own personal
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 car to move
one
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from one
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 place to another
so
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, so
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 if lawmakers spend their resources
in
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on
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 public
transport
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transport,
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then
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 everyone can go where they want to go
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at in
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in
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an
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 affordable price
so
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, so
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 they can able to save their income to buy
house holds
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household
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 things.
Furthermore
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,
It
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it
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 will reduce the traffic on the road, by investing
fund
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funds
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 in local
transport
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transport,
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then
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people
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avoid
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will avoid
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to use
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using
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 their car because of
price
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the price
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 and
afford
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affordability, and
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then
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 it will reduce their
time
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.
To
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For
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 instance, in metro
cities
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cities,
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 there is huge traffic in the morning and evening
time
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 because of office and school
time
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 and
people
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in
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are in
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rush
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a rush
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 to reach their destination on
time
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, by
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. By
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 doing
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this
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this,
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 it will not only
elminate
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eliminate
 all kinds of problems but
also
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 reduce the noise pollution in the city.
Moreover
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, it will create
a
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apply
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job
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jobs
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 for local
people
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. Funds
are
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apply
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spent by lawmakers on
this
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 domain create a
planty
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plenty
 of work for their folks,
in
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as
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the
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a
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 result
more
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, more
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 and more workers
willing
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are willing
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 to get
job
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a job
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 in
this
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secto
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sector
.Because they know
government
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the government
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also
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supporting
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supports
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 local
transports
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transport
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.
Along with
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that
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that,
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 they will earn money and can
full fil
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fulfil
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 their dreams , even
this
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 is
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a vin-vin
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vin-vin
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win-win
 situation for
policy makers
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policymakers
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 because they will
also
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 get
revenu
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revenue
form
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from
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this
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 and can spend funds
to
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in
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another
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other
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 domains.
To conclude
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, there is
nodoubt
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no doubt
 government should spend their resources
in
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on
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 local transport
for making
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to make
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 easy access to the public
but
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, but
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 at the same
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time
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time,
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 they can not overlook other domains
such
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 as making
road
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roads
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,
medical
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the medical
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 sector and education.

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plan
Make your view clear from the first line and keep it steady to the end.
linking
Link your ideas with simple joining words like also, but, and.
form
Use short, simple sentences. Check big mistakes to make your plan easy to read.
content
Your view is clear: you want more money for local transport.
content
You give a real life idea about big cities with traffic.
content
You show how spend on local transport can help people with jobs and money.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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