The charts below show the proportion of people’s spending on different commodities and services in a particular European country in 1958 and in 2008

The charts below show the proportion of people’s spending on different commodities and services in a particular European country in 1958 and in 2008
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the proportion of people’s spending on different commodities and services in a particular European country in 1958 and in 2008
The pie charts detail the percentage of people's consumption of various types of items and services in a typical European country in 1958 and in 2008. Looking from an
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent that clothing occupied the majority of the consumption in 1958,
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housing became the most dominant sector in 2008.
Furthermore
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, there were rising trends in housing, luxury goods, and food,
while
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clothing, entertainment, and travel/transport experienced a decline. In 1958, clothing had by far the highest consumption, though it plummeted from 32% to 12% in 2008.
On the other hand
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, housing had the inverse transformation with clothing, soaring from 22% to 32%, becoming the largest sector. To discuss the remaining categories in more detail, luxury goods
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and food had an
increase
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trend.
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luxury goods surged from 7% to 17%, food doubled notably from 8% to 17%.
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, travel/transport declined considerably from 13% to 6%,
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entertainment decreased marginally from 18% to 16%.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • proportion
  • commodities
  • significant shifts
  • technological advancements
  • economic growth
  • inflation
  • lifestyle changes
  • dietary habits
  • leisure activities
  • essentials
  • infrastructure
  • policy changes
  • societal values
  • spending patterns
  • spending trends
  • implications
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