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in some countries,it is possible to buy the products made in other coutries, To what extent do the benifts of this development outweigh the problem？

With the
globalization
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globalisation
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 of the whole world, the
exchanges
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exchange
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 of products between
countries
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have
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has
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 been increasing at an astounding speed. It is more convenient
that
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for
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 people can purchase many
goods
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 from
the
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apply
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other
countries
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 than ever before. It has been a controversy for a long time
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whether
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the
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imported products have a negative impact. In my opinion, the advantages of the policy outweigh
the
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its disadvantages. The most
importment
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important
 and obvious advantage of the imported commodities is the cheaper
price
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. Mainly because of the environment and
climent
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climate
, the fruits and the vegetables will be particularly suitable
growing
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for growing
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 in some areas in the world and
as a result
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, the higher the
yeild
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yield
, the cheaper the
price
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.
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, consumers can enjoy the blueberries overseas at a competitive
price
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while
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 the
price
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 of the same ones grown in their own
country
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 could be 2 times that of imported ones. It is
also
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 beneficial to the local
govenment
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government
 to import
goods
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 overseas because
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the govenment
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govenment
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government
 will have income
of
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from
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tax
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taxes
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. As for the society,
transfering
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transferring
goods
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 from
the
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apply
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other
countries
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 creates lots of famous companies and many job opportunities,
for example
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,
express
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the express
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 delivery industry. On the other
side
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hand
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, importing
goods
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 from other
countries
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 has
negative
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a negative
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 impact on some fields. Too much importing
goods
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 will lead to a situation
that
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where
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 some
industry
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industries
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 will
bankrupt
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for
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due to
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 the
price
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 factors.
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However
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However,
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 some industries are crucial to a
country
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 and once they
bankrupt
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, the
country
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 will suffer a lot.
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, the AI
industy
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industry
 is known as the most important one in the future. Relying too much on the other
country
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's technology will reduce the competitiveness of our
country
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. If we do not have our own AI companies, it will lead to
an
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unexpected unemployment in the future. Another problem is that we could have no
ablity
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ability
 to find the
dangerours
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dangers
 when we use the AI chips made by foreign companies if we have no own science and technologies. In conclusion, the advantages of importing
goods
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 should be accepted with caution.
Although
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costomers
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customers
 can benefit a lot
in
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from
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globalization
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globalisation
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, the
govenment
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government
 should pay attention to the development of some crucial
industies
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industries
.

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content
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lexis
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