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The charts give information about the percentage of men and women who had driving licences in one European country in various years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about the percentage of men and women who had driving licences in one European country in various years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of driving
licences
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males
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for males
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 and
female
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females
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 in one European country for seven
years
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 between 1976 and 2006. It can be seen that the
percentages
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 of
boy
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boys
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 and
girl
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girls
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 with driving
licences
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total
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apply
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in one European country
had increased
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showed an increasing
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 trend
for
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over
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 7
years
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 from 1976 and 2006.
Moreover
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, the number of driving
licences
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 men in here for the highest.
On the contrary
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, the proportion of young drivers between 17-20
years
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 old had
declined
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a declining
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 trend in
this
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 period. In
term
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terms
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 of the
percentages
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 of males with driving
licences
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jump
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jumps
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significant
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significantly
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 from about 70% to over 80%.
Besides
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, the
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percentages
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percentage
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 of
driving
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female driving licences
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licences
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 female
growth
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grew
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gradualy
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gradually
 by 30 % in 1976 and 60% in 2006. Looking at the data for one
in
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apply
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European country,
In
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in
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 1996 and 2006, the
percentages
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 of young drivers between 17-20
years
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 old declined steadily in men from 50% to 45%. Regarding these figures, there was a
drop
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substantial drop
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subtaintial
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from 30% to 20% in women.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words licences, years, percentages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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