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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, many people think that
countries
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 should
domestically grow food
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grow food domestically
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instead
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 of importing it. From my point of view, I disagree with
this
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 view as there are some
countries
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 which cannot grow anything.
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 essay will discuss the following topic and provide relevant reasons. First and foremost, exceptional cases for regions
such
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 as Iceland
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 hard to establish agricultural practices or plantations. So these
countries
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 focus on other aspects of
economies
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their economies
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 and
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on
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that kind of development.
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, if
countries
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 switch to growing stuff
instead
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 of trying to import it,
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 the economy of that country might crumble as the land will inhibit
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, there are some
countries
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 which benefit from importing
foodstuff
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foodstuffs
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 from neighbouring
land
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countries
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 rather than growing
things
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their own
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.
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, they prefer buying it from other
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.
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, as Saudi Arabia grew richer,
they
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it
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 started buying crops from Africa
as a result
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 of abundant yields and affordable prices. In conclusion,
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 it is important that growing
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food
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 to feed the domestic population is vital, there are sometimes situations in which we are forced to buy food outside.

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task
Give a clear view in the intro and in the essay. Say if you agree or not in one line.
development
Add 2 or 3 strong points with a reason. Use a real example or a plain one.
coherence
Link your ideas well. Use easy words like and, but, also, for example, however.
grammar
Check grammar. Fix noun and verb form and make plurals correct.
structure
Try four paragraphs. One idea for each body paragraph.
stance
Clear view on the topic.
structure
Good use of three parts in one essay.
coherence
Use of sign words First, Secondly, In conclusion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food security
  • domestic production
  • import dependency
  • political instability
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • nutritional deficiencies
  • comparative advantage
  • agricultural methods
  • local economies
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