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With the latest technological advancements, dating is now possible online. Would you recommend online dating for your single friends? What are the advantages and disadvantages of online dating? Write some examples to support your answer.

In modern
society
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its
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it's
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 becoming more and more popular to do online dating. Drastic
develpment
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development
 of technologies
make
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makes
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 it possible, and many
people
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 benefit from
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 opportunity. Some time
ago
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ago,
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 online dating
were
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was
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 considered to be not very popular. Some
people
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 claimed that it was quite
embarassing
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embarrassing
 to look for a partner
in
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on
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 the web.
This
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 could mean that a person was "a
desparate
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desperate
 loser" unable to find
someone
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 and had to
address
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resort
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 to
the
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online dating as the final remedy.
Frequenty
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Frequently
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people
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, people
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 have been even mocked by others for only showing interest
to
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in
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 online dating. What to say if
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 a person has ever gone
for
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on
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such
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date
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a date
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.
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?
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 Perhaps some
people
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 still share
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 an opinion, but I think they
become
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are becoming
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 fewer in number. As
the
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time goes
by
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by,
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 more and more
people
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 try online dating at least once. No
doubts
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 that some
people
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 do it out of
a
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pure
curiousity
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curiosity
, especially the youth. What young
people
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 wouldn't like to have tried
.
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However
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However,
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 many
people
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 go for online dates as they have the need rather than doing it just for a joke.
People
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in
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on
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 the web can be more
courage
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 to make the step forward and show their interest in
someone
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. I think that's because you know for sure that in
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place
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a place
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 all
people
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 are looking for the same. Unlike in a bar,
for example
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, where you never know if that girl has a boyfriend, whether or not she is in search
for
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of
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someone
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. Maybe she just dropped by to drink some beer?
Personally
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 I've never tried online dating. But I would have never judged those who do that. If
someone
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 has no lovemate, why not
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join the ambient where all are looking for the same. Especially since you can select
there
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them
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 out of hundreds of different
people
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 in order to find the most beloved one.

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task
Make your view clear. Say if you would recommend online dating, and end with a short conclusion.
structure
Group ideas in clear blocks: one part on old views, one on now, one on your own view.
content
Give one or two easy examples to back each point, like a small story of finding a partner.
language
Fix errors in grammar and spelling. Watch its/it's and other mistakes.
coherence
Use linking words to join ideas, such as and, but, also, for example, however.
content
The essay shows a balance of old and new views on online dating.
tone
The writer shows a calm tone and does not mock others.
structure
There is a comparison with meeting in a bar to help explain points.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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