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The process of growing and preparing pineapples and pineapple products.

The
process
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 chart below illustrates how pineapples have been grown and used to produce pineapple
products
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Overall
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, there are 6 stages in the whole pineapple
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products making
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product-making
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process
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, beginning with planting seeds on the ground and ending with making different
products
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 and delivering
it
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them
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 to other parts of the world.
To begin
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,
seed
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seeds
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 are planted on the ground at 23-30°C for 7 months. After that period,
ethaline
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ethylene
 has been spread to the plant, and, after 5 months, fresh fruit has been grown. That has been used in 3 productions to make different
products
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. In the first one, fruit has been cut down into small pieces, and at the next stage,
extractor
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an extractor
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 has been used to make juice out of it. In the second production
process
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, pineapple has been cut down again and again into smaller pieces to can them. And
finally
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, in the 3rd
process
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, ananas has been washed with wax and exported to other countries.

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grammar
Fix the grammar. For example, 'seed are planted' should be 'seeds are planted'.
vocabulary
Use the right word. 'Ethaline' should be 'ethylene'.
coherence
Describe the stages in a clear order with linking words like 'first', 'then', 'after that', 'finally'.
content
Check facts. The chart may show growing from crowns, not seeds, so be careful with wrong facts.
structure
Add an overview sentence and a clear closing sentence to help the reader.
grammar
Keep numbers and tenses steady throughout the essay.
content
There is a clear idea of the six stages and the main uses of the fruit.
content
You show how the fruit goes to juice, then to canned product, and then to export.
structure
Some linking words are used to show the order.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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