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The process of growing and preparing pineapples and pineapple products.

The process shows how
pineapple
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 is grown and its uses for products.
Overall
Linking Words
,
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pineapple
Correct article usage
a pineapple
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 is grown in a year and it is used in 3 ways depending on its size.
small sized
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small-sized
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 ones used to produce juice , medium for canned
pineapple
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 and big ones for export. Regarding to growing process ,
plant
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the plant
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 is located near other
pineapple
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 plants with
gap
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a gap
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 length being about
third
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a third
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 of a meter . The climate where it is grown is sunny and
temperature
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the temperature
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 is normal . After being raised for 7
months
Punctuation problem
months,
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 it is being sprayed with ethylene . In terms of juice , after harvesting small pineapples , the crown is removed from
crop
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the crop
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 .
Next
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Next,
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 it is sliced into small disks and put into
extractor
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an extractor
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 to become
a
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apply
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juice. Coming to canned
pineapple
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 , middle-sized
fruits'
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fruit'
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 crown is removed from
fruit
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the fruit
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 .
Next
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Next,
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 it is cut
by
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in
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 half , and it is cut into several circles or divided into small pieces .
By contrast
Linking Words
 , the
biggest size
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biggest-sized
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 fruits are waxed and put tightly into boxes and
boxes
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these boxes
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 are shipped overseas.

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structure
Use a clear intro that says what you will explain. Then write a short conclusion.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple words: first, next, then, finally.
grammar
Check grammar and use plural where needed: pineapples are grown, not pineapple is grown.
organization
Keep one idea in each paragraph. You can group growing in one paragraph and uses in another.
content
Make steps clear and in order. Use time words like after, when, then.
content
The essay gives three uses for pineapple and shows some steps.
organization
Some order in steps, like harvesting and cutting, is shown.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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