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Band 4

The internet has changed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems the did not exist before. What are the problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

1.The study’s main hypothesis was that a novel pertussis toxin-insensitive G protein, referred to as Gq, activates
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 from bovine brain. The paper intends to fill a clear knowledge gap, as “the specific G protein… has not been identified.”
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 relevant to cellular communication, since “PIP₂ hydrolysis is regulated by a variety of hormones.” The idea was
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 supported by the fact that, in most tissues,
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” thereby pointing toward a distinct G protein pathway.

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task response
The text does not answer the task. It talks about a study instead of the internet issue. To fix, write on the problems of the internet and give ideas to solve them. Add a small closing line.
coherence cohesion
Make ideas flow in a clear order. Use a short plan with simple links like first, next, and finally. Use an intro and a short ending.
language
Use simple words. Keep to basic words from the top 100. Avoid long, hard phrases. Try to make each sentence short and clear.
content
Topic is clear in the text: it is about a study and G protein.
coherence
Shows some linking words to join ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • mistrust
  • algorithms
  • privacy
  • cyberbullying
  • digital divide
  • inequality
  • digital literacy
  • social skills
  • productivity
  • screen time
  • digital detox
  • online harassment
  • data security
  • educational programs
  • monitoring mechanisms
  • digital etiquette
  • stringent
  • flag false information
  • unknowingly
  • profound effects
  • affordable internet access
  • non-profit initiatives
  • excessive
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