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The map illustrates the changes in Stockford City in 1986 and present time. Summarize the key points and make comparison. Write the essay in 150 words.

The map illustrates the changes in Stockford City in 1986 and present time. Summarize the key points and make comparison. Write the essay in 150 words.
The map provides information about a development plan at Stokeford
City
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 in 1986 and 2010.
Overall
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, there were
a
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apply
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significant alterations in
middle
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the middle
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,
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apply
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 and south areas of the town.
some
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Some
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 infrastructures
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such
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, such
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 as the bridge, and key
houses
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houses,
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 remained
same
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the same
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 from the initial year.
To begin
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 with, Stokeford in 1930 had 1 main road from north to the south.
it
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It
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also
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 had 1 major bridge to connect
northern
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the northern
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area
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 and
southern
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the southern
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area
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due to
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a
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the
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 Stoke
river
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River
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. The
city
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's Farmland were located in eastern and southern areas next to the river.
Thus
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, the household
were
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was
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 located in the central
area
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 with a
shops
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shop
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, a post office, a primary school, and a large house.
in
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In
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 2010,
The
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the
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city
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's residential areas were
spreaded
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spread
 alongside the road and the eastern part of the
city
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. The farmland
removed
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was removed
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 and became the addition of
household
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a household
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and
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, and
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 the large house became a retirement house in 2010.
Although
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 some major alterations in Stokeford, the key houses remained
exist
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in the
south
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southern
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area
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.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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