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The line graph below show the number of car produced in three different countries from 2003 to 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where releveant

The line graph below show the number of car produced in three different countries from 2003 to 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where releveant
The line chart illustrates the number of vehicles produced in three nations (
Argentina
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,
Australia
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, and
Thailand
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) between 2003 and 2009.
Overall
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, a glance at the line graph
provided
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revels
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reveals
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upward
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an upward
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 trend in
Australia
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 and
Thailand
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 of
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cars
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car
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 output, with
Argentina
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experienced
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experiencing
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decrease
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a decrease
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 over the period given. In 2003,
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Argentina
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Argentina's
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 production was 400
cars
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, the highest number in that year, compared to 300 for
Australia
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 and only 161
motorcar
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motorcars
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 for
Thailand
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. The figure of
cars
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 produced in
Argentina
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 dropped significantly to 100
cars
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 in 2009, the lowest among
three
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the three
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 countries. In comparison,
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Australia
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Australia's
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 output grew gradually to 400 vehicles in 2005. After that, it increased dramatically
at
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to
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 almost 1119
cars
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 by the end of the period. It overtook
Argentina
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 and
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Thailand
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Thailand's
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 production in 2009.
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,
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Thailand
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Thailand's
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 production started at the lowest point at the beginning of the period but increased consistently throughout the time,
reached at
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reaching
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 999 vehicles in 2009.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words argentina, australia, thailand, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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