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Drug abuse is an increasing propblem in modern times. Discuss some reason behind this and suggest ways it can be hindered.

There is no denying the fact that nowadays drug abuse has increased rapidly.
This
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 essay will discuss the reasons and solutions for
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 problem.
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 with, there are several causes for drug addiction.
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, many people start using drugs because of their friends or social influence.
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, stress and depression lead to
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 abuse, to escape the problems and emotional pain.
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, the lack of support or fighting at home can push individuals to use it. In terms of solutions for
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 case, the treatment needs assistance from all sides. It is
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 possible to say that consulting and therapy a professional
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 for those suffering from stress or anxiety.
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, the government should put strict rules to limit drug suppliers and dealers.
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, strong family bonds aid in preventing addiction. In conclusion, there are many ways to prevent
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 case from damaging the world. It is
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 true that the guidance from the parents and schools is the key.

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structure
Add a clear topic sentence for each paragraph to state the main idea.
content
Give more detail for each cause and for each solution so ideas are fuller.
coherence
Use more linking words to show the order and flow of ideas.
language
Check word choice and grammar to avoid mistakes.
structure
The essay shows a plan with an intro, body, and conclusion.
content
It stays on the topic and has ideas about both causes and fixes.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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