Some people believe that governments should spend money on developing public transportation systems, while others think that improving roads and highways is more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

There is no doubt that many residents think crucial
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the mass transit.
Others
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opinion that
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enhances
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the
roads
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and highways for the reason that government should focus on
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different
road
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roads
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for
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as well as
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public
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transports
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transport
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. In
this
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essay, I will discuss
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the more
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comfortable side for individuals and
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how
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the
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public transit is significant for inhabitants. On the
one
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hand, the authorities should pay attention
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the
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public
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transports
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transport
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owning to it is to encourage
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the environment.
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, there are
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plenty of
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inhabitants
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that inhabitants
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use the car for go fast their work
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not
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late to their job.
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, the fuel
cars
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reduce air pollution in the city atmosphere
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such
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as
,
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in Uzbekistan,
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where there
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are a lot of
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in
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family
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; we
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can see 5
cars
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per person
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. one
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one
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cars
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reduce pollution and
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factories. Citizens
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the dirty air
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, that
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that
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which
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is why almost
to
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70% of people have
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diseases.
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, Other people think the lawmakers focus on the prosperity of
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and private
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for rich people. These days, the number of public
transports
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is not
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a problem,
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for instance
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, undergrounds, buses,
train
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trains
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enough in every country
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apply
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kinds of public transit. The huge issue that
of
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, of
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course
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course,
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the numerous
own
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cars
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and traffic
jam
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jams
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.
Countless
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In countless
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countries, there are always
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traffic
jam
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morning and evening as
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a
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result of
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not
have
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having
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special
roads
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for
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public
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transports
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transport
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. For
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for
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example
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example,
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in
Germany
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Germany,
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we can see
there
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that there
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are
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a special track for
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long buses and trains
the
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. The
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government do not allow
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cars
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drive
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to drive
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their and citizens who drive
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on a
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a
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these
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special
path
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paths
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for public transport to
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by
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policymakers.
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,
although
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improving
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and highways can
facilities
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facilitate
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trade and encourage rural communities, investing money
for
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in
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public transport
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such
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, such
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as
into
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the
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buses
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buses,
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do
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makes it
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more comfortable like
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cars
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cars,
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numerous
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many
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inhabitants choose
go
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to go
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for public transport. It can
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help reduce the pollution not only
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one
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in one
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country
and
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but
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also
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earth
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Earth
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.

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Task response
Start with a clear view. Give your opinion in the first paragraph and say what you will talk about.
Coherence and cohesion
Put one big idea in each paragraph and keep links between ideas to help flow.
Coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words like also, but, because, for example to show the link between ideas.
Grammar and wording
Write short, plain sentences. This makes sense and avoids mistakes.
Grammar
Check common errors: use 'a' and 'the' correctly, add -s for plural, and use the right verb form.
strength
The essay tries to discuss both sides of the topic.
strength
The conclusion begins with 'To sum up', which helps show ending idea.

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