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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many
people
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 argue that secondary
school
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 should provide free community
programme
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programmes
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such
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 as free community
working
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work
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, specially
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specially
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especially
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 for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports. I
partialy
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partially
 disagree with
this
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 point because sometimes free services are not valued by others
and
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, and
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students
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 do not get interested
about
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this
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.
Firstly
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,
students
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 are busy with their other academic subjects. If unpaid
working
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being
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is
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 a part of their subject, they might
be not
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not be
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 interested
about
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in
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this
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 one. They will not do any extra
work
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besides
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 their study. If
authority
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the authority
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 gives them extra
facility
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facilities
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 for communal
work
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,
then
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 they may be more encouraged about that
work
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. It’s not all about money
but
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, but
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 sometimes
hardworking
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hard work is
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 worth
reward
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a reward
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apply
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also
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, which is every effective for
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school going
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school-going
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students
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.
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, despite having a busy schedule
a
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student can do extra
work
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 if they get something from that
work
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.
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, many
people
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 do not make any compliment if anyone
do
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does
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 anything for free, without paying money. Sometimes young
people
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 or
students
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 make
poster
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posters
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 for awareness of
dowry
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the dowry
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 system
but
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, but
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 rural
people
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 or elderly
people
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 do not take it seriously. Sometimes, they make fun
with
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of
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 them and take
it
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them
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 for granted. Meanwhile, many
company
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companies
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 advertise
about
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apply
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the harmfulness of smoking
by
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to
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the
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apply
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students
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, but the awareness
is
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does
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 not
increased
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increase
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. If any
students
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 give
lesson
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a lesson
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 to the elderly
people
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 about the exercise. The old
people
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 take it as a disturbance. Many of the social
people
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 underestimate the
lesson
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lessons
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 of young
people
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. So, giving help
on
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lesson
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lessons
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 by
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school going
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school-going
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students
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,
it’s
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it
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 sometimes will
be not
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not be
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 effective
on
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for
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 the charity, neighbourhood or teaching sports. In conclusion, without paying money a new subject which demonstrate the good thing for society will not place in the secondary
school
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students
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 mind
as well as
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 the commune
people
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 will be not accepted. Can you evaluate my answer properly now
like
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, like
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 as
ielts
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task response
State your view clearly in the opening line and keep it in mind as you write.
task response
Give 2 clear points and explain each with a simple example.
coherence
Use linking words to show flow between ideas (for example: also, but, therefore).
language
Check grammar and spelling; read aloud to find mistakes.
structure
Make the intro and conclusion short and close in idea.
content
You try to state a view and begin to argue it.
structure
Some ideas stay on topic and show you know the prompt.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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