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Writing Samples
Band 4

More people put their personal information online (address, telephone number,…) for everyday activities such as socializing on social networks or banking purpose. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Throw the period of
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technology
tchnology
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tchnology,
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 there are a lot of different types of
plat forms
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platforms
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 to make
the
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apply
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life easier and more comfortable for humanity. Some applications ask a personal information for using it
and
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, and
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 others
just
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are just
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 an option. These statistics have
to
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two
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 sides, the first one is positive, and the other is negative. The positive side is that it's easy to find
people
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 by their
informations
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information
 on social media,
for example
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, some old
friend
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friends
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 from elementary school stopped connecting with each other until college, they can find each other because of the simple way of using these applications.
Also
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,
people
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whom
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who
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posting
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post
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 their hobbies on
plat form
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platforms
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such
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 as
inastigram
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Instagram
 or Snapchat can meet friends
sharing
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who share
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 the same hobby.
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, A girl taking photos when she
workout
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works out
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 could find a friend in the same gym. The negative side is that some criminals can use the personal information like the address in a bad
wat
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way
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.
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, a girl
always
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who always
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put
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puts
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a
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apply
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photos
for
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of
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 his expensive
jewelries
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jewellery
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 on social media could get blackmailed or
stealing
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stolen from
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.
Moreover
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, some networks are not protected, so
humans
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human
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 statistics can be published everywhere.
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, A guy is trying to buy clothes on a strange website could lose his money or worse, he could lose all the money
on
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in
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 the bank. In
conclusio
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conclusion
,
people
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 should be careful when it comes to personal stuff
,
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;
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 it's crucial
to not
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not to
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 put something sensitive
in
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on
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 any website or platform.
Therefore
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,
people
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 choose to make things good or bad by how they
acting
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act
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 or which things
that
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they
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 can share or trust.

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structure
Make a clear plan. Start with a short intro that states your view. Then write body with one idea per paragraph. End with a short conclusion.
grammar
Fix big spelling and grammar errors. Use safe, simple words and short sentences.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go forward.
content
Give full examples that match the idea. Use real, simple cases to back up points.
content
Keep to the task. Do not go far from the topic.
content
Shows both sides of the issue.
structure
Has a last sentence that says to be careful.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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