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The graph below shows people’s level of satisfaction with the health care system in 4 countries between 1991 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows people’s level of satisfaction with the health care system in 4 countries between 1991 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart gives information on the proportion of the
level
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 of
satisfaction
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 with the
health
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care
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 system from Canada,
Uk
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,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and Us over the period of 16 years from 1991 to 2007 In
term
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 of the proportion of
level
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 of
satisfaction
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 with the
health
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care
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 system in Canada and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 was
substantial
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a substantial
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plumet
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plummet
 from 1991 to 2007. Changes in an
unfavorable
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 direction have caused the percentage of
satisfaction
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 with
health
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care
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 services to steady sạn only about 41 left
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 a moderate
go down
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decrease
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 from around 49% to over 46% When it comes to the percentage of
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level of
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apply
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satisfaction
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 with the
health
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care
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 system in
Uk
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 and
US
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the US
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 was a significant rise from 1991 to 2007. The good conditions of the services
health
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care
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 has brought trust and
satisfaction
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 with fluctuation change,
such
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 as during the period from 1991 to 2007, there was a quick
decrea
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decrease
 in
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UK
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the UK
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 from 21% to 29%.
Beside
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,
satisfaction
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 in the US
also
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 changed significantly with a slight increase of only about 11% From the graph, it’s clear that the Netherlands
contains
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 the highest rates of
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level
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apply
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satisfaction
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 experienced ,
out pacing
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outpacing
 the more modest trend changes include moderate
increase
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increases
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 and decrease
UK
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 and Us
while
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 Canada saw a notable decline over the period

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words level, satisfaction, health, care, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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