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The graph below shows people’s level of satisfaction with the health care system in 4 countries between 1991 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows people’s level of satisfaction with the health care system in 4 countries between 1991 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The shown line chart illustrates the
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 of people
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 who are satisfied with the medical management system in
Canada
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, the UK, the
Netherlands
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, and the US from 1991 to 2007.
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, all of those figures saw obvious changes. Both the UK and the US witnessed an upward trend,
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 the opposite was true in
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Canada
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 and the
Netherlands
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.
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 the rate of the
Netherlands
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 decreased, it still remains the highest position,
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 the US was the lowest. As we can see on the graph, the US and the UK stood at 10% and over 20% in 1991, respectively,
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 experienced an increase
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and remained much changed, and reach on 12% and 29%. In spite,
Canada
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 and the
Netherlands
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 have a higher level of satisfaction
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 both of them have a downward trend.
Canada
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 began at approximately 60 per cent ,
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 fell significantly by 20% and continued went on 40%, which number lower than the first number. The
Netherlands
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 still remained unchanged between 49% and 48% from 1991 to 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, netherlands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 3 times.
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