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The table below shows the number of students at a Malaysian secondary school during two school years. the charts show the result of a survey asking these students what ttheir favourite sports is

The table below shows the number of students at a Malaysian secondary school during two school years. the charts show the result of a survey asking these students what ttheir favourite sports is
The table and pie charts illustrate the number of
students
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 in Malaysian primary and secondary
schools
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 in 2005,
together with
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 the results of a survey on their favourite sports.
Overall
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, the secondary school had a larger enrolment than the primary school, with 91,000 compared to 73,000
students
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.
While
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football
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 was a common preference in both groups, the most popular sport differed
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 tennis was dominant in primary
schools
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,
whereas
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football
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 led in secondary
schools
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. Rugby was the least favoured activity across both levels. In primary
schools
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, tennis attracted the highest proportion of
students
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, accounting for 40% of preferences.
Football
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 was the second most popular choice at 30%, followed by basketball at 15%. Swimming was chosen by 10%,
while
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 only 5% of pupils selected rugby.
In contrast
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, secondary
students
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 showed a strong preference for
football
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, which was selected by 40% of respondents. Basketball ranked second with 35%, and tennis fell to third place with 15%. Both swimming and rugby were relatively unpopular, with only 5% of
students
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 choosing each.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, schools, football with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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