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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps compare the Beechwood farm in 1950 and today.
Overall
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, the farm shifts from agriculture to tourism, with some facilities added and the new roads are rebuilt ,
while
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 the key types of farmland,
such
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 as fruit trees, soft fruits, and vegetables, are retained. In 1950, there were three main areas for fruit trees, soft fruits, and vegetables between the track and the river. In the bottom right side, there were three buildings, including the barn, the farmhouse, and chickens. The main road was located on the top left side, and the river was banden on the bottom. The remaining area, that located on the top right side, was fed on sheep. Nowadays, the area for sheep has been removed. Half of the space is for tourism, where the parking and the camping field have been set up. The other space is for energy production, where the parking and solar panels have been built.
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, the barn building has been replaced by the holiday cottages, and the farm shop has been established on the farmland for fruit trees.

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structure
Plan a clear intro. Say what you will compare. Then write about the 1950 map and the today map in two short parts. End with a short end line.
content
Easy to see the main change from farm work to visitors use.
structure
Gives some key ideas like farms, roads, and new houses.

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