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The diagram below represents a survey on whether consumers would actually consider buying cars from tech companies such as Apple & Google. Summarise the information given in the diagram.

The diagram below represents a survey on whether consumers would actually consider buying cars from tech companies such as Apple & Google. Summarise the information given in the diagram.
The bar chart illustrates
percentage the
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the percentage
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 would consumers
abaut
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about
 buying
cars
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 by market in seven
countrys
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countries
India
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: India
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-
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,
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 China
-
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,
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 Brazil
-
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,
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 France
-
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,
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 Germany
-
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,
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US
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the US
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also
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, also
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UK
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the UK
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also
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, also
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 by age group .
Overall
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 , it is clear from the chart that
highest
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the highest
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 brand by market
it
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apply
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was in
India
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India,
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 it turn
to
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of
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 81
percent
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per cent
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,
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.
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construction
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The construction
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in
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market in
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UK
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the UK
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market
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apply
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had the lowest number of people who
prefear
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prefer
 to
swetch
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switch
 their
cars
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. First call , India and China and Brazil all
that
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apply
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three
counters
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countries
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 had increased more than others ,
although
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 in
ages
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the ages
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 from 18 to
34
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34,
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 it turned out to 65
percent
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per cent
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 group of people in
this
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 age who
changes
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change
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 their
cars
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 . In France
-
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,
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 Germany
-
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,
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US
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the US
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also
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 in
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the UK
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UK
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UK,
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 had
the
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a
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decreased
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decrease
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yo
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to
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 the lowest number
,
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;
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however
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however,
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 the group of people
that
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apply
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they
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who
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 are turn to 50 and
more
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older
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 had the
less
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least
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ages
Fix the agreement mistake
age
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 who
changes
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changed
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 their
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cars
Fix the agreement mistake
car
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 brand.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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