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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You have moved to another city but your bank has your old address and continues to send all communication there. Write a letter to your bank branch. In the letter, mention: •Where have you moved? •What problem are you facing regarding the bank’s communication? •What you want them to do regarding old communication already sent to the wrong address.

Dear
sir
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Sir
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 or
madam
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Madam
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, I am writing regarding in change of my house
address
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 and the concern I have with all the old letters being delivered to
old
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the old
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address
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. My previous
accomodation
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accommodation
 was 21
sagewood avenue
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Sagewood Avenue
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,Barrie
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however
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; however
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, I have relocated to 32
toronto street
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Toronto Street
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. I would appreciate
if
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it if
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 you could update my housing
information
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information,
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 as all my important letters are being sent to
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last
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my last
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address
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. Recently, I
had
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apply
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applied for a new visa card and I was expecting it
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to be delivery
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delivery
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delivered
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 within two weeks.
Although
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 I
acknowlege
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acknowledged
bank
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the bank
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 about my
address
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 change, it was not updated in the online banking system. Yet, I am still waiting for my debit card. Since
,
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apply
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All
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all
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 my private information is sent
on
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to
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 the
incorrrect addresss
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incorrect addresses
, I would be grateful if you
can
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could
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 not only block the card and send a new one to my current residence but
also
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 digitally
sent
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send
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 me all the information .
Therefore
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, I can
conitune
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continue
 my pending works. A prompt
respone
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response
 is being anticipated. Kind regards, Harsimran Kaur

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structure
Put one main idea in each paragraph and begin a new paragraph for the next idea.
grammar
Use plain spelling and fix big mistakes like 'accomodation', 'incorrrect', and 'address'.
content
Explain where you moved, the problem with letters, and what you want the bank to do in simple steps and order.
tone
Keep a polite and formal tone. Use a normal greeting and close.
tone
Polite tone and clear closing.
content
It lists all three points: move, problem, and what to do.
structure
The letter keeps to the main idea of speaking to the bank.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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