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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

To have a better
future
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, firm and well planning is essential;
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, we shall
invested
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 our
money
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 from an early age as an effort. I strongly agree with
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 concept, and in
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 essay, I will elaborate
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 reasons. It is universally understood that if we want to have a bright
future
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, we have to start planning it as soon as possible
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however
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, saving
money
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 is one of the
effort
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 we can do from those many ways to make it possible. Early savings grow over time through interest or
investements
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investments
, creating long-term financial independence
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, we can create
future
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 stability.
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, we never know what lies ahead, by having a safe net
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it
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would give us a "
safe-feelings
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". Knowing there is
money
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 set aside gives
peaceful
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minds
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 and
confident
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 to
facing
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 challenges. Personally speaking, what
most
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 important to start saving
since
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young
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a young
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ages
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 is; when there is an emergency situation, we can independently
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 the problems without
have
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 to burdening it on anyone.
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 saving
money
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 is assumed as a crucial
considerations
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, people who earn just enough to pay bills to bills will
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 an
encountering
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unexpected
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 situation. On the one side, they want to have a
secured
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 life without
have
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 to
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 what the
future
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 them, meanwhile their incomes are just enough; or worse, it does not even provide them a comfortable life.
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 case, individuals have to know their priority,
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 their effort must be harder in terms of looking for a side hustle. To repeat in short, saving
money
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 is essential and would be better if
start
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 from
the
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a
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 young
ages
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age
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. Having a
safe
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safety
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 net is beneficial to have a better life and the
futures
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,
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 it might create circumstances for some people who
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 opportune enough.

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structure
Organize the essay with a clear plan: one idea per paragraph and a strong link to the prompt.
grammar
Use simple sentences and check grammar to avoid errors that block meaning.
lexical
Choose precise words; avoid vague phrases and misspellings.
content
Give one or two concrete examples to show how saving helps in real life.
structure
Write a short conclusion that restates your view clearly.
task response
Clear position on saving from a young age.
coherence
Intro and conclusion present, helping readability.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • safety net
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • emergencies
  • future investments
  • retirement planning
  • financial discipline
  • habit of saving
  • amassing wealth
  • substantial fund
  • opportunity cost
  • additional income
  • inflation
  • purchasing power
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