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The bar chart below shows the number of international students enrolled in four different universities in Australia in 2010 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of international students enrolled in four different universities in Australia in 2010 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
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number
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 of Student Admissions in
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 different countries - The USA,
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 UK, Australia, Canada, and Germany - from 2010 to 2020.
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, America is the most popular country for abroad
pupils
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 over the period,
while
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 Germany
have
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a
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 fewest
students
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 in one decade among the others. Based on the data, in one decade, America has admitted approximately 500,000 abroad
pupils
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 for education, the highest value in ten years.
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,
The
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 UK accepted more
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with
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 400,000, around 50,000 more
students
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 than Australia.
in
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 10 years, Canada received approximately 300,000
pupils
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for
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 elevate their education. In the
last
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 position, Germany has the least student admission with around 250,000
pupils
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, and
also
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 notably it received half
students
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than
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 America in one decade.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pupils, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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