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The graph below shows people's level of satisfaction with the health care system in 4 countries between 1991 and 2007.

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The graph below shows people's level of satisfaction with the health care system in 4 countries between 1991 and 2007.
The given line graph illustrates the measure of individuals who satisfied the health care system in Canada ,
UK
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, Netherland and Us over the period of
3-year
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 from 1991 to 2007
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, the
level
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 of
satisfaction
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 has a clear difference between countries. Specifically , the
Netherland
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Netherlands
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 always
maintain
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 stability on high
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while
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the
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Canada has the most significant constant change
and
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 the US always
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 the lowest rate during the period . In 1991, Canada had the highest
satisfaction
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 rate at about 59% .
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 ,
this
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 figure fell substantially to about 20% in 1998 before recovering to 40% in 2007.
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, the
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 remained stable .
Satisfaction
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 achieved at nearly 50% in 1991 and 1998. But
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there was a slight decrease in the
level
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 of
satisfaction
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 in 2007 In the UK , there was a moderate growth in the percentage of satisfied people from around 20% in 1991 to nearly 30% in the final year.
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, the US recorded the lowest
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level
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 of
individual
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individuals
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 with the healthcare system ,
although
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 there was a slow rise in the
satisfaction
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level
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 from 10% to around 13% between 1991 and 2007

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Vocabulary: Replace the words level, satisfaction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • satisfaction level
  • comparative analysis
  • steady increase/decrease
  • fluctuation
  • health policy
  • government spending
  • global health crisis
  • public health initiatives
  • perception
  • speculation
  • historical data
  • implications
  • trends
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