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the diagram below showing the structure and use of simple solar panel. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the diagram below showing the structure and use of simple solar panel. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The process
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the structure and utilizing of
ordinary
Correct article usage
an ordinary
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 solar panel.
Overall
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, there are three main steps
,
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:
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first
Add a comma
first,
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 construct the box,
then
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 replace it
to
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with
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 heat
air
Use synonyms
then
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to
Change preposition
with
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 heat water.
Firstly
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,
box
Correct article usage
a box
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transperent
Correct your spelling
transparent
 with a top.
Then
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 it moved to
place
Correct article usage
a place
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whith
Correct your spelling
with
 a sun.
Case
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The case
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 has
a
Correct article usage
an
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 inlet which transmits the cool
air
Use synonyms
 in.
Also
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, it has
outlet
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an outlet
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 which
remove
Correct subject-verb agreement
removes
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 the warm
air
Use synonyms
out
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apply
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,
this
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 type of
air
Use synonyms
become
Correct subject-verb agreement
becomes
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 higher in temperature because of the energy given by
sun
Correct article usage
the sun
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. The main reason why
this
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 power is needed
,
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apply
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 is the fact that it helps to general operation of the panel. The second one is to heat the water. The same thing
but
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, but
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 with some changes in the construction of the box. The modification which was made is the water pipe.
This
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 thing is necessary for
process
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the process
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 since
liqued
Correct your spelling
liquid
needed
Wrong verb form
needs
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 to be delivered to
outlet
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the outlet
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and
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, and
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while
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occurs
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it occurs
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the
Punctuation problem
, the
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 temperature is getting hotter like it was in
first
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the first
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 one. In conclusion , the process of how
simple
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a simple
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 solar panel is structured and used was
showed
Wrong verb form
shown
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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